Finalising the Writing and Improvements

I have finalised my writing so that it could be published into Canva.

First, I have increased the content in Chapter Two, so that the story of the chapter would look completed. Instead of just describing the scene of the bombing process that worked out by a B-52D, I decided to add the interaction between the Spirit of Minot and the B-52D that flew on that mission, in order to explain more on the details of the deadly mission during war. 

Then, I changed the description for the plot when Minot bombed the energy's airport, so that when the audience read this part they can experience from the perspective of Minot. Also, in the draft I mentioned that this bombing mission was Minot's "another mission" after returning from the first one, but I decided to change it to become her "final" mission, so that it can foreshadow her first "retirement" from the active fleet, which will be the story for the last chapter of the book. 

For the last chapter, I did not make a lot of changes of the content, since I think that is how Minot going to be ended up. Probably I should add more details on the mechanics prepared for Minot's return to the fleet, but it was a bit too late for me to add the content, so I will have to leave it undone. 

There are also some minor issues that have to be corrected, such as grammar and the sentence structure. But everything was done in a rush, and the content of the book was obviously not the best I could have done. I will try to improve further if time is available for me. 

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  1. Zoe Van-de-Velde24 April 2024 at 06:51

    Good work - this has some good explanation as to what you did in final editing - well done

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